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2015 Student Conferences Term 3 By James

  Hi everyone this is my 2015 Student Conferences goal presentation.I hope you like it!!!

My 4 sentence recount

This term we are going to be writing all sorts of different texts. Here is my sentence recount about my AMAZING holiday going to the movies and watching phenomenal movies at the cinemas. It was so so FUN!!!

5/06/2015 J.T Speed Write Proof read The staining star shining in the dark sky.

SPEEDWRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title: The stunning star shining in the dark sky!!!
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)done in my writing	yes
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes

[Introduction]

Have you ever been wondering about beautiful shining stars in the dark sky? Well for a fact stars are not only small or big They can be all sorts of sizes. Also stars are a hot gases thing that you won't handle.Now I will tell you all types of stars.

Type of stars

Most stars including the Sun,are main sequence stars fueled by nuclear fusion  converting hydrogen into helium.For these stars, the hotter they are the brighter they are. There are also lots of  different kinds of stars they are, Black hole, Double Star, yellow Dwarfs, White Dwarfs and Heavy Stars. Would you see these different other stars in the sky?A double star is two stars together. Stars vary in size and they can range in size from 450 times smaller to over 1500 times larger than the size of the sun. Also the sun is a yellow g2 Dwarf star.

Appearance

Some stars are small some are big. Every star you see every night is bigger and brighter than the Sun. Also stars range in colour depending on how hot they are. Stars are like a ball of fire made out of gas and heat. Some stars are tiny because they are a huge distances away from earth. A big red star is formed after all the other phases of stars. It also looks like a guzzy star in a “pot handle.”

life cycle

Stars are born in nebulae, Huge clouds of dust and gas collapse under gravitational forces, forming protostars. These young stars undergo further collapse, forming main sequence stars. Once the star is born, there is a constant battle with gravity. The force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light. Some stars shine unevenly, and are known to be a variable star.

General information

The light from stars takes millions of years for it to reach earth. Sometimes there could be lots of stars in the sky but mostly there is 3,000 stars in the night sky. They are easily recognised as a part of star groupings called constellation. Stars are usually between 1 and 10 billion years old. Stars can live for billions of years!!!.

[Conclusion]

Now that you have learnt something new Feel free to tell other people about shining stars. If you want to learn more information go to this website: (http://www.enchantedlearning.com/subjects/astronomy/stars/index.shtml) to learn more.

3/06/2015 SPEED WRITE: The stunning star shining in the dark sky!!!

SPEEDWRITE: INFORMATION REPORT ON STARS

Today’s learning focus- WALT to write an information report on stars in 40 minutes.

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My Information Report Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading/title: The stunning star shining in the dark sky!!!
is an interesting title (I might have phrased the title as a question.)	yes	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
says what my report is about in a clear way	yes
gives a general “classification” – and maybe a technical classification	yes
outlines the main features of the subject	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
have clear topic sentences  (topic and main point)	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about)done in my writing	yes
may have helpful: tables, pictures and/or diagrams to add information
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes

Begin Writing Here:

[Heading/Title of Information Report]

The starning stars shining in the dark sky!!!

[Introduction]

Have you ever been wondering about beautiful shining stars in the dark sky? Well for a fact stars are not only small or big They can be all sorts of sizes. Also stars are a hot gases thing that you won't handle.Now I will tell you all types of stars.

Type of stars

Most stars including the Sun,are main sequence stars fueled by nuclear fusion  converting hydrogen into helium.For these stars, the hotter they are the brighter. There are also lots different kinds of stars there are Black hole, Double Star, yellow Dwarfs, white Dwarfs and heavy Stars. Would you see these different other Stars?A double star is two stars together. Stars vary in size and they can range in size from 450 times smaller to over 1500 times larger than the size of the sun. Also the sun is a yellow g2 Dwarf star.

Appearance

Some stars are small some are big. Every star you see every night is bigger and brighter than the Sun. Also stars range in colour depending on how hot they are. Stars are like a ball of fire made out of gas and heat. Some stars are tiny because they are a huge distances away from earth. A big red star is formed after all the other phases of stars. It also looks like a fuzzy star in the “pot handle.”

life cycle

Stars are born in nebulae. Huge clouds of dust and gas collapse under gravitational forces, forming protostars. These young stars undergo further collapse, forming main sequence stars. Once the star is born, there is a constant battle with gravity. The force of gravity inside is so intense that nothing can escape it, not even light. Some stars shine unevenly, and are known to be a variable star.

General information

The light from stars takes millions of years for it to reach earth. Sometimes there could be lots of stars in the sky but mostly there is 3,000 stars in the night sky. They are easily recognised as a part of star groupings called constellation. Stars are usually between 1 and 10 billion years old. Stars can live for billions of years!!!.

[Conclusion]

Now that you have learnt something new Feel free to tell other people about the shining star. If you want to learn more information go to this website: http://www.enchantedlearning.com/subjects/astronomy/stars/index.shtml to learn more.

The Shining Light of Moon!!!

In Week 6 of Term 2 our class focussed on how to write great explanations. We wrote about the Moon’s different phases as we are in the middle of learning about Planet Earth and Beyond. Learning how to write a great explanation will help us with our self-guided topics in a few weeks time. Here is my writing, after I have self-assessed and peer-assessed my work.

WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?

Have you ever wondered about the Moon and why it changes shape every night? Anyhow, the moon has phases that changes its appearance. Nevertheless, I am going to clarify why does the moon look different every night.

1st paragraph

While the moon orbits the earth we see less of it’s lit up side of us. This means that the moon has been tilted from our orbit around the hot sun. However, Some random people think that the shadows of the earth is causing the phases to move but they are not, it is actually caused by the reflection of the sun. Meanwhile, It’s also about the amount of that bright side we can see as the Moon moves through its orbit.  

2nd paragraph

For a fact, there is also lots of Phases of the moon. Another thing is that There is eight Phases and they are called new moon, waxing crescent, first quarter, waxing gibbous, full moon, waning gibbous, last quarter, waning crescent and finally back to new moon. These phases can also help you with all the phases you need.

3rd paragraph

Every month, there is a lunar month it goes on every month, Why is there a lunar month? Because the phases happens every day. Any ways, it takes two days for the Moon to catch up to the Earth's orbits. The lunar month also is a month where it is measured between two Moons.

Conclusion

Overall, I hope this explanation has helped you and told you a lot of facts about why does the Moon change every kind of phases.  Seeing and reading all of this work if you want some amazing facts about the moon go to this website (http://www.planetsforkids.org/moon-moon.html) Hope you have learnt something new and share it to a friend.

My Explanation Success Criteria:	Self	Peer
My heading:
is the question WHY DOES THE MOON LOOK DIFFERENT EVERY NIGHT?	yes	yes
My opening paragraph/introduction:
introduce what my writing is about in a clear way	yes	yes
hooks the reader	yes	yes
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	yes	yes
2-3 sentences maximum	yes	yes
My main paragraphs/body paragraphs:
clear topic sentence and supporting sentences	yes	yes
are organised so that each paragraph is about a different aspect of the subject	yes	yes
give detailed information (factual descriptions)	yes	yes
include specific, technical vocabulary	yes	yes
are generally balanced (have a similar amount of detail about the different aspects I write about) done	yes	yes
connectives and time connectives	yes	yes
descriptive language	yes	yes
formal language	yes	yes
My end paragraph/conclusion:
draws the report together/sums up my main points	yes	yes
may give a personal opinion; ask the reader a question and/or tell the reader where further information may be found	yes	yes
write an interesting fact	yes	yes